Posted by Mikey You started out good. The story was building to a real good read. And, like many others, the sex came too quick bro. Slow your roll man and take your time. You have a skill to capture the mind, but you get too far ahead of yourself too fast. Note to you and other writers: Please know when to use you're and your. Its hard to read through a story with those simple errors. Keep practicing man and tell your next one slower. ;)
Posted by Jiezon got me SO horny!! I came while i'm reading even if i didn't touch myself!!
Posted by Seymour Cox aka: Chico Brisbane Mikey, Thanks for the feedback. I'm new at this and can use all of the feedback I can get. Much appreciated Sy
Posted by Nike One of the best stories I've ever read.
Posted by jay agree with 1st review - you are good but slow it