Posted by FM That was much better sir, you have talent.
Of course, you just need some extra touches of english. Try putting speech marks (") whenever someone says something. Simply, put them around whatever is being said. Toby put my arm around me and I recoiled. "What's up Chris?"
"I'm sorry Toby, I can't do this now." I replied. :-) Do that in your next story. Good day, and godspeed. (Oh btw, your story is AMAZING :))
Posted by J Very good story. Can't wait to read next to see whar happens between Chris and Toby...don't make us wait long!
Posted by chris fisher Thanks for the feed back, part three & four are on their way.
I have made some revisions to part two it might be easier to read when they take effect.
There might be a slight delay with the next parts as someone is helping me to edit it, these tings take time but they are on the way.
Part four is the last one hope you enjoy it, it’s a bit different.
TJ and Tyler's relationship seems to be going round in circles. Luckily TJ's got a strong enough will power to sort everything out. Tyler can once again accept TJ's apology, sadly not everyone is that forgiving...
I was instantly greeted with warmth as I brushed over his shaven pubic patch. I slowly ran my hand down the length of his cock and it was immediately obvious the sheer size of it...