Posted by dave Great seed story, just wish it was longer.
Posted by Romeo Nice story just make it longer. Like 2 pages or more.
You need to put more information in the story. Like what do the vixit in the country. What do they see? Do they go to any clubs, movies, beaches, restaurants, or other places? What do they talk about when sight seeing, do they sight see?
We don't even know where Tyler bought the watch or what it looks like.
May be it's just me but I think Kial dick should be longer than Tyler.
Posted by Patrick This is AWESOME!!!! keep them coming man!!!
Posted by Patrick I know its a leap but could you make them longer, great quality should be drawn out.
Posted by Mendez At last!! Some sex...and what sex huh?? :P
The sex part was very cute and mushy!! I for one have nothing to criticize but I agree with Patrick Romeo and dave...IT HAS GOTTA BE LONGER!!!!!
Posted by Zac The story is ok!it is good but it is short, make it longer please!
Posted by Peter It is very good!! Keep writing nd make it longer!! Oh and some more drama!!
Posted by Hawk Lyra Really good! Listen to Romeo, use his ideas to lengthen your story.
Posted by Laura maybe make the story a little longer but this is really good, please carry it on. it made me curious at to what might happen later on, please wirte more. ~ L
Posted by Shawn Williams nice story it was well written.I totally enjoyed it. Please keep writing. I would like to see a part 4. Want to find out what happens next with Ty and Kyle.
Posted by Abel nice story, make the nex one longer.
Posted by Gus I don't know about the others, I like it a lot made me JErk twice. Awesome!
Posted by girltemporary9 nice story, I can't wait te read the rest of it.
Posted by berryman41 wow this is so romantic....
I love this....
Hope u have more stories to cum!!!
Posted by neil a nice piece of writing tyler.....yeah i do accept that a little more on length and expression in your writing(details,drama,love n silence)can really flame up bosom....regards....looking forward for blossoms of love in ur stories.....
PS love making was apt n cute....as it should have been
Posted by Kevin This was fabulous.
I wish you'd put as much details into the romantic parts as the sex scene, though.
It was very realistic, and very sexy.
Posted by Alex Hey I love the stories and you should definitely keep writing them. This one keeps me holding on and dreaming until I find love of my own. Thank you:)