Posted by mark It was good for a first part. Could have made it longer, although it keeps the tension going.
Maybe add some more seual detail in next time.
Looking forward to a second part
Posted by dave wat the fuck was that, it was a complete rip off of the "big brother" show and a bad one at that. there is nothing going on for this story and little part that has any sexual contents is poorly written and was rushed i'll be surpised if anyone finds this story a turn on. u need to add a hell of alot more detail to the sex and make the storyline more beleieveble wouldn't it be more realistic that one of guys just came on to another guy with out the tv show people in the jurnal room tell the guy to come onto james! learn how to write!
Posted by tony hey, i liked it.
Posted by Romeo I'm hoping there's more to this story. It was to fast and didn't say anything
You could have given more description of all these guys, more details about the sex and conversation. How did they get to know each other? They went from entering the house and to knowing each other the next day.
Speaking to me by the urinal was this hot looking cowboy type driver with his hard 8 inch prick in his hand. Now only was he hung, he was cute as a button. Couldn’t have been no more than 5 foot 9 inches tall but built like a brick outhouse, as they say. How could I resist. I would give this stud a freebie if he wanted...