Posted by Mikey Your story telling/writng skills are there, but you pushed the story through too much. Too much happened in such a short time. It was over before it got moving. If you'd have slowed it down, you easily could've gotten a second and maybe a third page out of it and really built up your characters. You have potential, slow it down man. :)
Posted by me I agree with Mikey.
And you wrote that the boy is straight, very straight, and he doesn't hesitates when his teacher is kissing him or something.
Posted by B_894 Well, this was a rush! Found it real good though, it's a good story for a quick jerk. But you are on the right track you could write more on those guys you can developp a lot on them.
Posted by Michael Booker Sex stories can right to the point and still be as satisfying or even more satisfying than a slow-paced story. However, this story is more of a plot for a cheesy porn movie than a real story. Stories don't have to be entirely realistic, but reality shouldn't be completely thrown out either. It just doesn't seem like this could actually happen in the way you described.
Posted by Nicky Hi.I do not know if this really happened to you,but if it did I wish I could do the same with you.
Posted by ac good story
Posted by Mike This is possibly the worst story I have ever had the misfortune to read.
If I could have given it 0 out of 10 - believe me I would have.
Posted by Zack Mike so he did bad. We all make mistakes except you? I wanna see you give it a try. Pathetic ugly has-to-get-off-reading-stories jerk.
Cross Dressing and romantic gay sex.
Ken, the narrator from "Church of Monday Night Football" cross dresses and goes on a date that turns into an all nighter...
"OK, Adams, you fucking useless piece of shit. I'll give you a D, but first you need to prove to me that you know what respect means." With that, he started to rub his crotch through his gym shorts...
