Posted by Mikey You started off solid enough bud. I was just starting to get a feel for your work. Next thing I know they're having sex and its all over. You could've easily drug it out to 2 pages man. Also, little tip: Proof read. I'm not perfect. Made a few errors at times, too. (Never proof read in the middle of the night-lol) If you give it another crack, take time to build the world you're looking to share. Let us see through you what you have to say, what you think and feel.
Posted by dan great story and I want to hear more