Posted by VC That was so shit! You need to check your speling and grammar and get to know what turns people on!
Posted by NbN This story is far too rushed. As soon as any kind of action is introduced, it's far too quickly dealt with, without any detail whatsoever. The spelling and grammar is terrible... There are many spelling mistakes in here that a simple spell-check could solve... Stories that are at least spell-checked before being submitted get an extra point or so just on merit. Writing stories is a craft... This is just a rambled collection of mental images that is over before it's begun.
Posted by asasd corny
Both me and my friend Josh were busy with a fight with our girlfriends... we needed to get off, and decided that we could take advantage of the situation without feeling guilty at all...
