Posted by Dan V The story was cute however in some scenes I fely like I was playing volley bal who was doing what. In otherwords seemed to be to busy...this one ws doing this as that one doing this and the ending was a little cliff hanger....what happened tomason after the toilet?
Posted by czykguy I do see that it can be a bit confusing but the world we are visiting is a busy school world and to keep all balls in the air all the time would be wrong when the object of the story is the central character who is new to this underworld within an ordered society
Posted by jay OMG UR A FUCKEN GENIOUS AN AMAZING WRITER!!! lmao this was really good i also liked ur other one umm loving dad lmao DAMN UR SO GOOD!!
Posted by Craig God this is fuckin brilliant!! anymore to cum????
Posted by Paul d'accord, dudes -- czykguy is fucken brilliant!!! Ttally wonderful sweet hot story....
Posted by Paul I agree, you've really got a great thing goign -- total obsession amidst a plausible and very complex social scene. Really talented writing.
Posted by Tommy really go writing and story line, part 3???
"Well . . . I'm sure I'm not gay. But I've always been curious what it would be like. And . . . well since we've been best friends all our live . . . ah . . . well . . . do you think you'd want to try it with me?"
