Posted by Seymour Cox Dayaaaamm!
Posted by Mikey I never read part 1 until tonight. Part one was a bit rough, but you're coming into your own bud. I'd like to see part 3 more than one page. You're building to some great things. Did they get caught, and so on. Will it work? Good job bro. :)
Posted by Jeff Jon, I liked the story-line between two jocks who become friends first and then lovers.. That’s believable and how most first time gay experiences actual occur in real life. What is not believable about your story as well as 95% percent of stories that I read on this website is the way Jason came on to Andrew. Certainly one jock just doesn’t come up to another jock and asks if he thinks there is something more to their relationship than just a casual relationship. That just doesn’t happen in the real world and why most gay stories on this website aren’t believable.
What does happen in real life is that one either hints to the other, or flirts with the other, or gaydar is obvious among the characters in a story.. Then a lustful gay encounter occurs after the fact.
The reason I point this out is because I think you write well and I liked the story. Just remember it next time when you write one to make the characters first gay encounter more believable.
BTW--I think there is at least another chapter here and can’t wait to read it.
Posted by james sweet dude i hope that there is going to be more i like these 2 they are so hot
Posted by SexyHorneGuy You need to keep going with the story! They are amazing! Please just keep writing and I can keep reading and getting off! ;)
Posted by Alex Hey love this hope u keep up the storyline
Posted by jamahl jeff if you did not read part one you should because it clearly states that jason is not a jock. also jon keep writing these stories you are an amazing writer lke most people on this websitee
Posted by Bobby Part one you said Andrew was from Florida and part 2 u said Cali.
Alex seemed only slightly distracted by Mike's lack of inhibition. As for me, I couldn't take my eyes off the restless, snake-like shape of his sizable cock pressing out against the crotch of his skimpy underwear. Never had I imagined he might be endowed so well...