Posted by tom very good want mush more
Posted by Philip Thanks Tom, I can assure you this is a true story from when I was in the Merchant Marine sailing down the west coast of Africa... Also my first story that I have enjoyed writing, your encouraging review will lead me to write many more...
Posted by muleslave Well written and extremely hot. More soon please!
Posted by Robert I found the begining of the story moved slowly. I know you have to develope the characters so you may want to initally shorten some of the character development.
I found the general action(s) of the story satisfying with some twists and turns that I had not exspected.This without a doubt kept me reading the story.
Finally, shorten your paragraphs. Shorter paragraphs make reading the story much easier on the eyes and the mind.
If this was your first story please continue it I think you are on to something here. Nice Work!!
Posted by alonso This story is not true in it he mentioned jury in nigeria no jury also i live in that particular city he got a bit correct but mostly it was just wrong seriously you cant tell me about my own backyard anyway nice imagery
Posted by Philip A pity you doubt the veracity of my tale and the use of the term "jury" which is not used as the name of a town in Nigeria.
Further to this story I spent 9 years in Nigeria in Warri, Port Harcourt, Lagos, Abuja and Sokoto. Giving devoted service to several masters. Thanks Alonso
PART 19: Ludwig learns about his "Love spot", and about a few other things too... He spends an extraordinary summer in France, thanks to Will and Paul... But at the end of August, he has to go back to Berlin: What's in store for him in Germany?