Posted by Tim This story isnt that bad. It is a rather good one but the speed it gets into everything is to fast. Put a little more background info or something to hold attention in the begining then u got a great story.
Posted by h ahhhhhh PWP.
Posted by David G. Jon I rather enjoyed this story. Rather quick and to the point though. Slow it down a little friend. Other than that, it was pretty good!
Keep it up!
David G.
Posted by Sam Bayliss well the others allready told you what i was gonna say so why waste lines :D i just think that you need to describe your boyfriend a little more!
Posted by Sam Bayliss well the others allready told you what i was gonna say so why waste lines :D i just think that you need to describe your boyfriend a little more!
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