Posted by Evan This SUCKS ASS!!!! Don't fuckin add all the explainations!!! Just get to the good part THE SEX!!!!
Posted by Brandon first off, i think you're doing well for your first story, i'd love to hear more of it! and second, im also from minnesota :) would love tog et to know you!
Posted by Borgie Your story is really boring.
Posted by Web Cam I like your writing style but as far as the story itself goes, you didn't write enough to give us any sort of ideas about what is going to happen. You basically introduced yourself and said that you went to school on the bus. lol. Keep going but make sure that every part of the story gives the reader something to think about, and make sure you develop a story line. Each part needs to tell us something new and significant. Good luck! ;)
Posted by nyree Hey i live in minneapolis wonderin if yu wanna chat . Tell me a lil more bou yo story p.s im nyree
Posted by docnels I like your story. Keep it up/
It was only supposed to be a photo shoot...that's all...nothing else. But a first-time CD model...a virgin, no less...should never turn his soft, smooth bare bottom toward a horny old married man!