Posted by Mike BORING!!! Yet another wham, bam, thank you man story. The stories with exposition of character and a real soryline are just so much hotter than this crap!!
Posted by Mike also Oh come on...at least they used a condom in this one. :P LOL
Posted by josh that was great, i hope to hear more from tyler.
Posted by Mikey It started off solid enough, but the action came too soon. I can't stress it enough guys; slow down and tell a good story. To your credit you use good illustrative words and you do capture the mind. Granted you left the audience thristing for more. You have strong potential and if you nourish your skills, the next chapter could be pretty solid. Good luck. :)