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Posted by Michael Booker I like the voyeurism in this story, I think it works really well. It also leaves suspense about what will happen between Jordan and Danny, which has me wanting to know what's going to happen between them in the future chapters. One of your best stories to date.
Posted by ivanacock the story is gud on its own but not in a seris. they dont link up well. i often find me self goin hu? wot? when did that happen? and i've read the first 2 carefuly as well!
Posted by Amish You have a good grip on the story-line. Keep them coming in a steady flow! I've read somewhere in the past that "necessity is the mother of all inventions", and the need/necessity of being with someone for Danny has truly mixed with curiosity, which has added the necessary spice/ingredient to invent whatever twist you may want to bring to your series! Trust me, apart from being a talented story-teller, you are a good writer as well! When one reads any online work that has only a few (if any) typographical errors and almost no use of slang, it speaks for itself without the author needing any complements! Bravo!!! Please keep them comming with a steady flow - like I said before!
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