Posted by jerry hutchens good start
Posted by Romeo Good start but all of that could have been one chapter. I hope you write more but with longer chapters.
Something needs to happen soon to catch the readers attention. I read all three chapters and you haven't cought my attention yet. Sorry manbut that's how I feel.
Posted by derek cnt u ri8 more??....................i mean its kinda turning ito a bore actually :( sorry bt...............