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Posted by Hiram Green
Great, Believable, and can't wait for the next installment.
Posted by Hunter Falls
This was great! Please keep writing, I can't get enough!
Posted by Lucas
your story is good. very touching. but try to add more erotic things happens in the story. i will rate this story with 8.
Posted by Lucas
oh... i gorgot to tell you, please writes more. i can't wait for your part 2.
Posted by B
It was really great, i mean i could feel the emotion in it. I loved it, and cant wait for the second one. I could read it all day, and hope the 2nd one comes really soon.
Posted by Ken
This is a kool story. I really enjoyed this. Please continue.
Posted by FitzChivalry
Thouroughly enjoying this, thanks. Particularly like the way you are building the characters and their lives and not just stampeding off to the bedroom.Keep it up (as it were!)
(p.s. keep an eye on the typo's - they sometimes hinder a good read)
Posted by Cam
Yeah I agree, this story is good and has a nice plot. I like the way it isn't just rushing into sex.
I do think that you need to look at the spelling and grammar, things like 'of' and 'off'. Re-read it over again before submitting it, or get someone else to look it over. This could be pretty good if it was.
Also, it gets a little confusing because in England school finishes at 16, yet he is still there at 19 in America, when I thought they finished at 18? I tend to get confused about the American school system anyway. Or maybe it's college or university?Don't know how that works but never mind, I guess that isn't important.
But you wanted advice, it needs to be realistic.
Sorry if it seems like I have gone on a little but that's just me. I still think it is a good story. Just don't rush their relationship too much.
Posted by Jason
GREAT story, please continue!
Posted by K
I loved it! Can't wait for more.
Posted by dan
that was great hurry up and write next part. aww so beautiful
Posted by Janice Dobson
Thanks for all your reviews. It’s all been so helpful. I will try my best not to make anymore typo's. The next part will be coming soon.
PS: Sorry if there is confusion over the whole school thing. I did mean collage. Everything is school to me, including collage and University but I've made sure it's all correct in the next chapter. Sorry!!!
Posted by John
This is great stuff. I really enjoyed this. Can't wait for the next installment.
Posted by Slm
Fix your typos and you will have an amazing collection of stories.
Posted by Ci-Ci
good story! I'm glad it's not solely based on sex. Your story is the best I've read in a long time... no lies keep up the good work!
Posted by brandon
That was the most passionate story I have ever read! It was hot!! Exactly how I want my first boyfriend to be! 5 stars!!
Posted by Tucker Johnson
Hey Janice, I want you to know that I really respect your story-writing. I like the more romantic nature of the story, as compared to the purely sexual exploits that are usually to be found in these stories. As of right now, yours is one of three series of stories that I actually appreciate out of all of them on this database. I want you to know that you're doing an excellent job, and please keep it up! Also, I hope I'm not sounding like too much of a critic, but I have this thing with grammar and spelling, so i'm taking the liberty of emailing you back this story, with a few minor changes to some language issues that I've found. I hope I'm not coming off as too condescending! Good luck, and keep writing!
Tucker!
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