Evans Journey : Part II reviews

What if jake walks in on evan and tom and things get complicated after. Ur the expert, please cont.

you have a valid point but evan is still finding himself you can't fool around with one person and call it good.

hey great story. ive just keep on rubbing to it! although try to stay in one persons point of view. first you would be in evans and then it was as if you dtanding beside them say what they were doing 'I' in evans point of view and then 'they' in a 3rd person view. it wont change the story but it will make your writing sound a lot better. secondly i think that it would be great to get all 3 f them together and and then make them not care about the other person and have a 3-way. or you can get evan to choose who is better by getting the other 2 show him who is better. anyways you are a great writer and you should considerate being a writer when you are older. i would love to get to know you for i am a teen and working on becoming a writer. i am going put on my first story soon. my user will be 'lycanhawkins' so it will be done by summer break. hope that you all like it and good luck to you josh. cant wait toread your other stories :]

Hey when is the next one coming out?