Forbidden Friendship reviews

The spoken words need to be separated from actions. There were a lot of places where actions were in quotes. Also, it develops too quickly, out of nowhere one asks the other if he's experimented. Just my opinion.

You get an A- for effort. Ur storie was rather too predictable. There was no sexdrama, no conflict or central tension. From 1 writer 2 another. BREW the Drama in ur next story, thicken the plot and give us a dick flogging, cock screwing, cum busting story. With luv.

Oh! Write 2 me if u want to exchange stories, i do it wit other writers it helps.

you are one horny man iwish i was there withyou

Cute story, would u continue?