Posted by steve excellent..very moving
Posted by paul *****! excellent. I loved it. Can't wait for part 2
Posted by paul *****! excellent. I loved it. Can't wait for part 2
Posted by Will I have never seen a story so detailed....awesome!
Posted by Ken Loved it!!
Posted by J Church Sorry, if you're looking to write a sex story, and maybe you're not I don't know, every chapter should have sex in it. In this case, a short story, one third of the story should be the lead in and the rest should be sex. IMHO...You might want to read "Elements of Arousal. How to write and sell gay men's erotica"
Posted by Chip I read the story to my lover as we lay on the bed and we both got off. It's a warm and very real story.
Posted by Brandon Mac (The Author) J Church, to me, just putting sex in every paragraph doesn't give enough inner detail and makes a very tedious story. Putting in extra background information builds up anticipation and makes the story a lot of enjoyable. Thank you everyone! I'm about to start on Anthony 2 =)
Posted by TobiasSF AND WHERE IS THE HOT FUCKING SEX!!!!!!
Posted by Brandon Mac (The Author) Sorry Tobias, but the majority liked my story, so I intend to remain on the same structure. If you want a store with nothing but sex, go find one with little to no thought at all in it.
Posted by Oppolo Don't worry about it Brandon, there are far too many horny young twinks that just wanna get off in this world, they just don't care about emotion. You're right, putting sex in every 4 lines doesn't always result in a good story...
Posted by Ben Hey I dont really care about the whole age thing i'm 16 And have a better grasp on relationships than most adults. This story is so touching, I really hope to oneday have a relationship like this. Bro, Dont worry about not having so much sex that would just undermind the depth of your relationship....I mean Romeo and juli....well Romeo and Romeo wouldnt be as good if it had explicet sex scenes in every act. I like the story and out of respect never get off on it.
Posted by John Hey is this really a relation ship your in??? if so its sweet.
Posted by Brandon Thanks everyone. Wow...as for he who mentioned age...you might be suprised to know I'm 17. This is not a real relationship I'm in...although I'd like it to be.
Posted by Manolo Chico Brandon, Variety is the name of the game. In between hard pron you put in such a lovely soft porn story. Lovely!
Posted by HAD vERRY GOOD
Posted by Brandon (not author :) I loved this story and I'm glad Im not the only teen out there reading this stuff! Dont change a thing...the emotional part is much more arousing than the sex stuff anyday! This is a great story and I'm looking forward to the second part!
Posted by howie i found your story to be really hot and unlike the guys who just want to read about fucking i like more of a story first. great job can't wait for #3.
Posted by howie so when is # 3 coming??????????
Posted by Dameron The story behind the sex made it even better.
I almost came just by reading the story.
I wish I had a relationship like that even if I'm only 16.
Posted by Chris I read this story like every night! I think it is the best gay sex story that actually had a story to it! I thought you story was amazing. It had romance,it kept me waiting at the end of my bed and of course it had great sex! I wish i had a relationship like that when i was 16!!!!!!!!!
Posted by chris i love this story so much i wish it could happen to me!!!
Posted by MIKE I READ THE OTHER REVIEWS AND SEEN MAY LIKED IT BUT SOME WANTED SEX BUT LIKE MANE SAID EVERY STORY WILL NOT HAVE SEX SO KEEP WRITING YOUR STORIES THE WAY YOU LIKE IT TO BE . I LIKE TO STORY JUST BECAUSE IT DID NOT HAVE MUCH SEX I STILL LOVED IT
Posted by MIKE SEE THATS WHAT A STORY SHOULD BE U TWO DID NOT HAVE SEX UNTIL U BOTH KNOW U BE TOGETHER TEACH MANY OTHERS. DAM HOT STORY BE THE WAY WRITE MORE PLEASE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Posted by Boy Feet Lover ;) God, you horny ass people that want sex in every single paragraph... that wouldnt even be a good story. I liked this story`s plot and structure, it was perfect. Cant wait until number two Brandon. ;)
- Horny 17 year old from California, USA
Posted by noel one of the coolest stories here.
Posted by albsexy WOW that was so HOT I got the hardest hardon the storey was well told mmm so sexy well done keep it up (as you kept mine up ha ha ha) can't wait to read part 2 well done xx