Posted by Mike This has to be one of the shittest stories I've ever read on here.
If you're going to post anything please try to make sure that it is of at least a passable standard.
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Posted by Ken Good Start. Grammer needs a little work in a few places but otherwise looks promising as a continuing story if you are doing so. I would like to see where this goes.
Posted by Alan Prescot The stories is ok but it need work and it look like a 13 year old written that and very poor grammer but you're doing a good job :{)