Posted by paolo marco this is story is pretty good. i like its orignality... i really want to see what happens next...
Posted by Shayes I loved this story...I study the arts and am very gay, myself...I look forward to reading more about the Darkmancer...
Posted by Phyllis This story has great potential so far. Unfortunately I'm having problems focussing on the plot due to the terrible sentence structure, misspelling and puntuation errors. A suggestion -- start editing your work or have someone else who is familiar with sentence structure, punctuation, etc. edit your work prior to posting. Even the greatest authors have editors. Definitely continue writing in this genre -- it is one I enjoy completely, and the addition of erotica only makes it more enjoyable.
It seemed as if there were a hundred dicks to suck and like a hundred dicks fucking him, each taking their turn. Peter wanted to impress his buddies, so he took everything they threw at him in stride….besides, he liked it!..
The sensations of two cocks fighting for superiority in his mouth became exhilarating, whilst the third cock in his arse now began to constantly hit his g-spot. Tim felt his pulse racing faster than ever and his temperature rising as his own climax neared. His friends were not going to believe it when he told them about this...