Posted by jack brilliant! loved it! so fuckin hot!
love that to happen to me.
write some more of that stuff please. maybe a second part?
Posted by Robert Lawrence Wilson You repeated too much of the first part at the end for me and left it hanging about afterwards.
Posted by nick OMG this was so hot i cant stop thinkin gthat this type of fantasy can really happen...
Posted by MARCELL VERY VERY GOOD! STEAMING HOT! HOWEVER ALL THAT HAPPEN
WITHIN THE TWENTY MINUTES THE TEACHER LEFT?
Posted by Brian I loved this story.I'm with Jack please write more and it would be really cool if u made a second part.
Posted by mark i don't know why the whole story repeated itself afterwads though. seems a little strange. but yeah i agree it is pretty hot. wouldn't mind reading more of that
Posted by Michael Booker Um, I'm not sure why the story repeats itself. I really doubt that;s the way I submitted it. But, oh well. Thanks for what a lot of you said anyway
Posted by Alex This story is great! The details are wonderful! It gives such imagery and I love how they still are insulting to each other as they have sex! This is a great story, very well written!
Posted by Kat Great story, the ending was ohhhhhhhh so GREAT!
Posted by the g unit great job both hands on the keyboard poeple that story was hotttttttttttttttt.
Posted by Cody First time I have ever cried in a sex story. This one took me a while to read because It was only in my free time. But I longed to read it when I wasnt. Thanks for such a wonderful story Time for you to write a novel. That would be hott
Posted by Mitchell Hey,
I just wanted to let you know I really enjoyed reading your Detention series. they where great. They actully had a story to them. You inspired me to write my own story,
Your wicked.
Posted by Joseph This is the besst story I have ever read, can't wait to read the others!!
Posted by Jimmy fucking amazing! love the ending :P 3
Posted by paul hilarious, man..
Posted by xman loving every hot second of it,
Posted by JayJoe Bravo, bra-fukn-vo, Michael!!!! Dat was very well done: gr8 details, nice pacing & dialogue, hot sex & the last line was PERFECT. Only thing I'd change is when Chris stands & Brandon says it's long & thick; just leave out the sentence in the (). As d reader I'd have been even more turned on if d 1st time I know it's 11" is when it's in Brandon's mouth:)
Posted by ramza first review im writing, never read a story god enough. the way they talk to each other like a love hate relationship, i hate ones where they start to cry and the other starts to cry and they all cry and end up sparkling like pussies. this is epic, STUNNING end. the subtle kiss, that owned bro. awesome work.
- im so glad this is only the first :)
Posted by edgar i would like to make up too
It was a hostage situation gone bad - kid died. Evert was the main link between the faction and the police--he blamed himself -- He drifted into deep depression. But trust Prescott; he wasn't going to give up without a fight. He was going to bring back the sunshine to his lover's heart...