Posted by reviewer8228 Awesome story! please continue it, I want to hear what he does next!, but make some more detail if possible.
Posted by Joe Of corse you should continue! It's just getting good!
Posted by bob YES
Posted by the honest critic Writing level is basic and hinders any eroticism. Characters have no depth (what is their motivation? Desires? What personality traits do they have?). Saying something like: "I took my shirt off and he liked it" is not erotic--it reads like a virgin that is trying to express a fantasy but has only bad porn and elementary level erotic literature to draw from word/ideas from.
Posted by Suckmycock Fuck that was soooooo hot, I cummed just like that. Of course you should fucking finished, I wanna see some more sucking, fucking, licking, etc.
Posted by kevin Well done.Keek writing the way you want to and ignor morons like "the honest critic".Morons like him are so full of shit.........
Kevin
Posted by anthony oh please continue
Posted by aaron garcia shut the fuck up "the honest critic" this was an awsome story!!!!
My acting experience was limited to a couple of high school plays. I never seriously thought I would get the led in an Of f Broadway production. At best I expected to maybe hired as a stage hand. I was floored when I got the call from the director telling me I got the part...