Fire in the Firehouse 14 reviews

mikie is a great writer and should be praised highly this is a great series and should be encouraged to continue

I'm setting the stage for big changes. And I'm trying to develop all the characters and advance them-make them grow. I can't just spend time on Mitch/Colby all the time. I found myself against a wall. It was becoming Mitch/Colby fuck-fest over and over. I decided to focus on Drake/Cole's relationship since the other two are in different places. And I needed Nick to explore his feeling about his son and Marie's vulnerability with the fire. I had Mitch go through a range of emotions and Colby is clueless of what's coming. I appreciate your feedback, but I'm really proud of this chapter.Mikey

Mate, what's happening? Your last two chapters, though enjoyable reading, have as Mike says, appeared somewhat jumbled. The introduction of new characters was good in taking the story in opening up other angles and all that, but it seems that the characters are all competing with each other for prominence, especially in the last two chapters. Maybe it wouldn't be a bad idea to have Mitch and Colby on the periphery in a chapter or two, and have the odd chapter focus on either of the other characters. Kinda lika a branch road that runs parallel to the main road with small glimpses here and there of whats going on on the main road. That way, I think, it would make for easier following and also develop all the characters fully though separately, although not divorced.