Posted by Brian Need to work on grammar.
Posted by why The story line was okay, but they story was written horribly, and filled with poor grammer, it kept me from really enjoying it.
Posted by Lisa yeah I just read it, the grammer made it really bad. Maybe the other 2 will be better
Posted by Martin I agree with all of yall, the grammer wasn't the best.
Posted by tangybutt@yahoo.com lame story and you need to learn how to spell. Your grammar is horrible
Posted by Jesse The grammer suck, and Its not a good story...
Over all I didn't like It one bit, sorry.
Posted by Jesse . sucked I meant *cries*
Posted by strenation its an awesome i liked it fuck u made me come out
Posted by Broderick Holy Cow, Well When I First Started Reading It, It Sounded Pretty Damn Good. Then, As I Got Into The Story It Just Fell Apart. First Off, Your Grammar Is Posotively Sickening And Really Ruins The Story, Jesus Learn Where To Put Suffixes. And Second Of All, Who The Hell Fucks In A Classroom! And In Part 2 You Mix Up Everything, And The Story Really Makes No Sense. I Suggest You Get Out A Storyboard And Plan Out Your Stories Before You Just Throw This Shit Down On Paper. Oh Yeah, And Try Proofreading a Couple Of Times, And An English Class Might Help. Dumbass.
