Posted by jack It was good. But there could be a bit more description about the actual story and the sex part. Maybe getting the characters to speak, instead of telling it. Also, make it longer next time, adding more to it. Not enough description. Otherwse, I thought a good start. Looking forward to the next part.
Posted by Ruud van Tintelen Please, go on!!
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