Posted by Ryan Isaac Good story. It has potential. I didn't much care for the ending though. It was like good then just hit a brick wall
Posted by Don't have one. thats a horrible story. Spelling anf grammar would be nice, to start off, and why pick on the kid? Jesus, have some sort heart.
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Posted by noah the story is good but it needs alot of edditing so that it maybe more stimulating.does jonah know about this story being on net?
Posted by Kweisi Thats so awful yet cool at the same time3 it was a pretty cool story wood wish you elongated it some instead of the abroubt ending
Posted by Kweisi When i said awful i ment what you did to jonah
Posted by guest he said it was fake!!!!!!
Posted by guest he said it was fake!!!!!!