Posted by mark like the story but its a bit confusing with who is saying what when people are speaking.
if you seperate the speaking text with the actual story then it might be easier to read by starting a new line.
more description as well
otherwise its good
Posted by Jeremy Yea sorry hehe.. My part 2 is kinda weird.. Part 3 will let you know exact details.. I was rushing part 2. I promise more for 3..Just bare with me.
Posted by hey! i liked it a lot, i thought it was really good and somewhat romantic.
Posted by Matt I loved both stories - wow! I hope Part 3 will be fucking awesome!
Posted by Joe would never happen-- if only life were that easy.
Posted by wow500 this was great... u have real talent.i bet the next one is even better---hurry w/ it plz
Posted by willy omg i love these stories so much im writing sum myself but your's are WAY better
Posted by nick blake that was a great story why didnt u put part 3 on here yet pls do soon
Posted by james m OMG MAKE MORE PLEEEEEESE!!!!!!!!!! i love this story better and better every time i read it.
Posted by marc i think it was awsome cant wait for the third on plese hurry when i hurry i mean hury
Posted by marc okay this is my second post you said number three would be here by the end of the week and i waited all week and theres no third storie to pain ub ny heart what happened is there even gping to be a third one fell free to email me see ya....
Posted by Rhaf Part 3 pleaseeee!