Posted by JM wow, your off to a good start. I like the way you write, you make people think of what's going to happen next and that's what people like on here. but next time make sure its a little longer.
but keep up the good work bud. can't wait till the next part.
Posted by Romeo How long did you say it took you to write this story?
There better be more because that's nothing.
Posted by John Nice story but, you need it to be longer, and you make it where there readers wonder whats going to happen next...
Posted by John Nice story but, you need it to be longer, and you make it where there readers wonder whats going to happen next...